Brief description of final draft

Two men (Me and Ellis Sneil) have taken a man hostage in an Industrial building and are waiting to meet their new contractor (jack Barber). There is a great deal of tension as they are unsure if they can trust the man they are supposed to be meeting. The Hostage is tied up on a chair, central to the room. He has no escape. Soon after the contact arrives and the men begin to question him. The man 'Jack' is carrying a bag of money. Which through a series of flashbacks we find out, is stolen. This soon leads to confrontation and an attack on the Two men. Jack manages to escape and the men pursue. It turns out to be a setup and a group of thugs begin attacking their position.  

Peer evaluation of first draft film.

We recently showed our first draft of our film (last man standing) to a group of friends and selected teachers. We received mixed comments however most were negative. There were certain parts of the film that people really liked, for example, certain camera shots and action sequences. But we received lots of criticism on a lot of things. Mise en Scene was a big problem for us as we had not put our research together properly and had used the wrong type of location for our genre. We hadn't payed enough attention to our audience research. We also received some harsh criticism on certain actors and their un-convincing performance. We have however taken alot of the major mistakes under reconsideration. In the final copy of our film we hope that we can deliver an excellent viewing experience to anyone watching.
Because of the constructive criticism we have decided to pay extra attention the the Mise en scene, as the acting was poor in our first draft. We will plan our final draft in detail. covering each point and each shot so nothing can go wrong.

Change of certification

We have chosen to change our certification of our film from an '18' to a '15'. We have also chosen to keep all swearing used in original script and filming but have 'beeped' them out using the software, Adobe Premier Pro. using this software we were able to cover the swear word with a distinctive beep. This allows younger viewers to watch the film, knowing there is a swear word there and understanding the seriousness of the situation of the moment in the film, without them hearing it.

Re-filming

We have found a local pub, where they hire out there basement for meeting etc. we have thought of this location for re-shooting our film. As it will look more authentic than our previous idea of our school conference room.
contact:


The Railway Hotel Pub 

85 Station Rd, Walmer, Kent CT14 7RL01304 368776 ‎
Photo's of the interior of the basement room will be uploaded tomorrow.We will evaluate these photos and decide whether to book this meeting room or the drama room at school

updated script

The Last Man Standing. Swift Getaway Productions

This is the main dialogue scene...the majority of the film is based around an action sequence.

Starring:

Georgie Watson: Jimmy 'JJ' Jones

Joe Haddow: Joseph 'The Bear' Bayter

Ellis Snell: Hernay Kapala 'Moss'

Ed Stow: Big Eddy

Jack Barber: Jackie B

plus many more...
Script:

(Ambient discussion) - In the background of the setting.

Narration: 

Close up of Jimmy Jones smoking 

Jackie B : throwing chips into pile  i raise

Jimmy Jones :  you feeling lucky hernay 

Jackie B: twisting a pocket knife

Hernay : Jimmy you joker 

Jackie B : We playing cards or what ?

Hernay : Well we would be if that joker delivering the package actually got her on time 

(Tracking shot) of Big Eddy with briefcase containing "drug money"  as he approaches gangs headquaters

Jackie B finally bout time 

Big Eddy : Its all here 

low angle shot of the breifcase with JJ in the background

Jimmy Jones: So its all going ahead yh 

High angle shot of group putting their glasses together 

Group opens the briefcase (group shot)

(close up) of content of the briefcase containing ripped up paper 

Jimmy Jones: What the f*** ! (beeped out)

Freeze frames of group drawing guns 

(mid shot) of hernay cocking gun

(long shot) of Big Eddy making a run for it 

Hernay fires the gun

silence: (blank shot) production company fades in (A Swift Getaway Production presents) 

Jimmy Jones : nice shot Hernay

Hernay : Thanks 

Jackie B: F*** the cops (beeped out)

(long shot) of cops entering the building

Jimmy Jones: Theirs the assholes

Machine gun firing at the cops

cops ducking

(tracking shot) of the gang leaving the room

(Jump scene/tracking shot) of cops chasing the gang

(mid close) up of Jackie B hiding under the table

(mid long shot) of cop searching the place 

(two shot) showing the cop being shot off some stairs 

(Low angle shot) of the cop falling to the floor 

Jump scene 

(Long shot) of Jackie B being shot in the back by a cop while attempting to make a run for it 

(low angle shot) of body on the ground and cop approaching the body 

Editing

Now we have filmed our short sequence we will now edit it to make it look better and slot shots in certain places to fit the sequence. The editing softwares we will using are:

• Adobe Premire Pro (on the iMac)
• Memory stick to convert the file to different hardwares

For sound we will be using the various files (avi, MP4, etc) on the iMac which contain sound effects, like software such as SFX etc. we will using effects for gun shots, windows smashing and doors slamming.

rough digital storyboard

Digital Storyboard

Extreme close up of waiters name tag
to show the audience who he is.

Then there's an tracking shot of the waiter walking
through the restaurant

Waiter arrives at table and offers drinks to group of mobsters
group shot

Two shot of  the Bear speaking to Jimmy Jones

Close up  of waiter whispering something into Jackie B's ear.








Mid Shot of The Bear

Two Shot Moss & The Bear speaking

Mid shot of Moss

Mid Long Shot of Jimmy Jones

Long Shot of The Bear

Long Shot of waiter (Big Eddy) leaving












Tracking Shot of Toni walking up to the table

Mid shot of Toni sitting down at the table

Main storyboard has been drawn up on paper